What do you think of my comedy?

Well i'm trying to start a stand up comedy channel on you tube
but i need your thoughts
here something i just made up

how you ever met someone who talked to much
you look at them and tell them to be quiet
they still be talkling
in yur mind you be like i want to slap this person i really really do
one time i went to mcdonalds and i was waiting to order behind this
fat lady
i swear she must of been ordering for 30 minutes straight she looked
back
and said "oh your waiting" no bitch i'm just standing here
damn fat people need to stop eating at mcdonalds
thats why their workers be so tired
fat people be order 20 boxes of chicken nuggets and shit
people look at them like " is that all for you"
i don't know how eating all that by yourself is possible
i be like "bitch do you ever get full.
what's even worse is the people that work their be fat
stomach hanging over they jeans and stuff
a fat bitch could get a job their
but a skinny nigga like me cant
whats wrong with this world
it's not suppose to be a joke
its just suppose to be funny